Cat in George
Curl Drive, just outside Jones Tower

“See you!”

They drive off and I walk into Jones. And then out again on the other side and head to Lena’s apartment. She’s at the window and steps out the door as soon as I show up; she has a carryover bag.

We start walking back to Jones. I touch her hand. She looks at me. “Let’s do that tomorrow, when you walk me back.”

We continue in silence; as we get close to Jones, Lena says, “Can we go in by one of the other doors? Somehow this is really embarrassing when you’re not doing what everybody thinks you’re doing.”

“Of course we can. I don’t really need any nudge-nudge, wink-wink either.”

I let us in and we walk up the stairs to my room. I look at the calligraphy on the door. ‘Maybe even you will find Valimar.’ Yes, even we can reach strange places. What about others? And can we take them back again?

We go in and I close the door. She looks at me thoughtfully.

“Thinking deep thoughts?”

“Very deep. They’ll keep until tomorrow. I already brushed teeth and so on, so why don’t you get ready?”

“OK”

I grab the bathrobe and take it with me to bathroom, get out of my clothes and brush my teeth. I look at the clothes on the floor and I put the underpants back on. Better. She may be camping here, but I’m not going to build a tent for her. Bathrobe on, exit.

“Nice bathrobe.”

I smile. “I’ll pass the compliment along.”

She smiles. “Cool. I’ll turn my back, so you can get into bed.”

I toss the bathrobe into the chair and get into bed. “It’s safe.”

“Alright.” She picks up the bathrobe, hangs it over the desk chair and sits down in the chair. “So now what? It’s probably easier for you if I turn out the lights?”

“Yeah.”

She gets up again, turns the light off and sits down. “Good night, I guess.”

“Good night.”

Chard's picture
Add "in: "We get in and walk up the stairs to my room."

You may want to come up with some different wording. You start two paragraphs in a row with "We get [in]" and the quickly add "I go into":
We get and walk up the stairs to my room. ...
We get in and I ...
...
I go into the bathroom
Rob's picture
Good points all. I changed things around a little.
Chard's picture
"She’s at the window and steps out as soon as I show up; she has a carryover bag."

Lena steps out the window?

"Yes, even we can reach strange places. "

Grammar's a bit odd.
Rob's picture
I made the door explicit.

For the other thing, do you have any suggestions? I don't see a different way of saying it.
Chard's picture
We continue in silence; as we get close to Jones, Lena says, “Can we go in by one of the other doors? Somehow this is really embarrassing when you’re not doing what everybody thinks you’re doing.”

“Of course we can. I don’t really need any nudge-nudge, wink-wink either.”

I let us in and we walk up the stairs to my room. I look at the calligraphy on the door. ‘Maybe even you will find Valimar.’ Yes, even we can reach strange places. What about others? And can we take them back again?

We go in and I close the door. She looks at me thoughtfully.

We continue in silence, which was broken only when we neared Jones. “Can we go in by one of the other doors? Somehow this is really embarrassing when you’re not doing what everybody thinks you’re doing.” Lena's face, reddened slightly, looked pleading.

“Of course we can. I don’t really need any nudge-nudge, wink-wink either.”

Thankfully, we didn't pass anyone on the way to my room. Unlocking the door, the calligraphy adorning it grabs my attention. ‘Maybe thou shalt find Valimar.’ Maybe, indeed. It certainly is a strange place. And it can't be any stranger than here. Yes, I can reach strange places. What about others? And can we take them back again, even if they're not hobbits?
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The odd grammar is that "Maybe even you will find Valimar" doesn't flow straight into "Yes, even we reach strange places." Since I'm not heavily into Tolkien's mythology, I don't make connections that those steeped in the lore do. So, there's a logic gap which comes across as odd grammar since I'm sure the two sentences are connected but I don't know how.
Chard's picture
I let us in and we walk up the stairs to my room. I look at the calligraphy on the door. Yes, even we can reach strange places. What about others? And can we take them back again?

I don't remember what the calligraphy says. If you are going to reference it, I think you should spell it out again.

What are you trying to say, "Even we can reach strange places?" Is CiG referring to "mere humans" who thought there was nothing weird in the world? The oddity is that there is no context for the statement, no foundation. I think I understand where it is coming from but being sure would be nice.
Rob's picture
Excellent point. Done.