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George in Cat | In the car

  • George in Cat | In the car   2 years 2 months ago
     
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    No, you didn't. There is a background story there, which I want to insert when I get around to an overall revision.

    As for Her Gobbliness (notice I sneakily corrected a spelling error behind your back), that's a title formed from to gobble
  • George in Cat | In the car   2 years 2 months ago
     
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    Nick and Nicole? Did I ask about why the similar names before? Are they twins?

    What is a Gobblines?

George in Cat | Midterm

  • George in Cat | Midterm   2 years 2 months ago
     
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    Good point. I've changed it.
  • George in Cat | Midterm   2 years 2 months ago
     
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    "That saves time with grading and on one occasion showed up an error in the test before any of the students had reached it."

    Grammar is a bit odd. I think "..on one occasion showed an error..." or something else. "Showed up" is awkward.

George  in Cat | Morning

  • George  in Cat | Morning   2 years 4 months ago
     
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    I think it's the decision between Kate and Mark. It gets spelled out a little clearer in a later section.
  • George  in Cat | Morning   2 years 4 months ago
     
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    Minor correction: Best get out off bed. --> Best get out of bed.





    I had the same difficulty with respect to "that hurts" - wasn't sure what it was referring to. Maybe it will be made clear later.

    and maybe, it would be clear if I went back and re-read, but not sure how far I would have to go back

George in Cat

  • George in Cat   2 years 4 months ago
     
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    George/Cat has accepted. It's not the same thing as pleasuring her body but they said they wanted what they had and then started describing Mark. It'll be interesting to see if the barrier motion is related to the acceptance or if it's to another plot piece.

Cat in George

  • Cat in George   2 years 4 months ago
     
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    "Trans-barrier wake-up services." Trans-barrier, transgender, transmutation, transportation, translation, etc, etc, etc.

    So, they are changing their names. I see you have stuck with CiG and GiC for this chapter. Will that change in the next chapter? As readers, are we going to change with them as if they had come out to real people. "Mom, Dad, I'm Harry." "But you're Alice, that's what we named you." I'm a boy, Mom. I want to be called Harry." So, now it's just Cat and George, with their history of the opposite world? But no more CiG and GiC? (Since they want to stay?)

George  in Cat | Jones Tower

  • George  in Cat | Jones Tower   2 years 4 months ago
     
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    This reminds me of the one sentence chapter in As I Lay Dying by Faulkner: "My mother's a fish."

    I don't recall anything in the pieces from earlier today about George going out.

    ...Wait, wasn't George supposed to go grade papers while Kate did lab work? What happened to that? Did it slip George's mind? Are we supposed to know it slipped their mind?

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    And since George didn't go out, are we about to see a "get into the mood" scene for George? And what will Kate's reaction be?


    Tune in tomorrow for the next installment of As the George's Turn.

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