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Cat in George | Curl Drive, just outside Jones Tower

  • Cat in George | Curl Drive, just outside Jones Tower   2 years 9 months ago
     
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    Add "in: "We get in and walk up the stairs to my room."

    You may want to come up with some different wording. You start two paragraphs in a row with "We get [in]" and the quickly add "I go into":
    We get and walk up the stairs to my room. ...
    We get in and I ...
    ...
    I go into the bathroom

George in Cat | In the car

Cat in George | Kansas Flying Chicken restaurant

  • Cat in George | Kansas Flying Chicken restaurant   2 years 9 months ago
     
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    Change up your apostrophes:
    “If you’re crying from last’s weeks movie, you should do The Crying Game.” needs to change to “If you’re crying from last week's movie, you should do The Crying Game.”

    Nice call out on the movie, too.

George in Cat | Jones Tower, 5:30 P.M.

Cat in George | Midterm

  • Cat in George | Midterm   2 years 9 months ago
     
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    Need to add a "to":

    "Though I’ve got to admit that afterwards"

    "He nods, then makes eye contact with me and gives me a defiant look." Did you mean to use defiant? Is he challenging Cat for telling him to skip it?

    Also, why are you showing Cat and George having the same interaction? They both offer pretty much the same advice, just in slightly different forms.
    George: "Try to calm down. You have plenty of time left. Close your eyes and think of something else for a bit. Something you like."
    Cat: “If you can’t remember, just skip the question and do the other problems.”

    Also, George notes the guy is happy. Cat says "I'm happy." (Is she being sarcastic or sincere?) What is the point of this difference?

George in Cat | Midterm

  • George in Cat | Midterm   2 years 9 months ago
     
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    Has this ever really happened to you? A kid in a college class freaking out over not knowing inches to miles conversion? How hard is it to just railroad the number out? (12 in/ft)(5280 ft/mile) And what type of remedial math class goes over stuff like that?

Cat in George | Morning

  • Cat in George | Morning   2 years 9 months ago
     
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    "As it cools down, it undergoes a phase change. Symmetry is broken and more order is revealed." Would you mind providing a link to where in the story this is referring? It seems like it is a quote of an earlier convo but it's not coming to mind.

George in Cat | Morning

George in Cat | Jones Tower, 8 P.M.

George in Cat | Dreese Lab, lunch time

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